مساعدة صغيرة ....اريد تصحيح نمذجي مفصل

مرحبا اريد مساعدة طلب منا استاذ مادة الانجليزية ان نقوم بكتاب كاملة سيرة ذاتية انا ضعيفة قليلا في مادة الانجليزية ساريكم ما قمت به لكني اريد نصائح او تصحيح نمذجي مفصل وجزاكم الله

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grigori rusputin the holy man and the mad monk was a russian mystic adoctor and an advisor he was born 1986 into a russian peasant family in asmall village his mother died when he ws born

this great man impressed many people with his knowledge he cured the son of nicholas 2 by using the hypnois so as asirprise he becameth advisor to the romanovs but also he nicholas became the clandestine political of csar nicholas
he died from drowing into the icy neva river 1916 and some people said that his death was afactor in the fall of russia



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